Monday, October 4, 2010

Microfiction Monday #22 Ultimate Power


Raya shivered. She was beginning to doubt Sultan Kacbar's plans as they flew on the regal steed Hoap to the twin-towered city of Chainge.
(140)

And another one:

Jorj Ssoros (the parrot) spoke. Destroy capitalism, Karbac, & you'll be Sultan of the World. The people will depend on you, not themselves.
(140)

Susan at Stony River Farm hosts Microfiction Monday. She posts a picture and you compose a story in 140 characters. You can click on Susan at Stony River Farm to get further instructions. Here's a link that will count your characters for you: Design 215.

Thank you for hosting, Susan.

29 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Both are great ones, Pat, but yours always are!

Sylvia

Peggy said...

Liked them both,you sure know how to entertain with your words!

Book Bird Dog said...

I also liked them both! Clever use of words!

anthonynorth said...

These were excellent. Nicely done.

Ms.Daisy said...

Pat,
You've got me in your corner now! Loved it - very clever!


~Jean

SouthLakesMom said...

ZZZZING! Most Excellent Pat! Wow! Very well done!

Susan at Stony River said...

Oh, very well done -- and so true!

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Both were really good, I can't decide which one I like more.

Diane said...

Definitely makes me want to know what happens next! :O)

SandyCarlson said...

So well done. I admire your creativity.

Thom said...

So creative my friend. They both are excellent. Have a great week ahead :)

Marina said...

Great stories!
I like the first one the best! :-)

Michael G-G said...

Well, you're in an anagramistic mood today, Pat! Very clever satire. (Just so you know, I like parrots.)

Have a great week.

Deborah said...

I loved them, like little tasters of a story to come!

Jim said...

My vote is a solid majority for the first one, Pat.

Hoap is a nice horse. It is just too bad the Sutan is not to be trusted.
..

quilly said...

Doubts while being whisked away on the wings of Hoap? That does sound like deviltry afoot!

Ellie said...

They are both great, but especially the first. Brilliant as always!

Have a great week x

jabblog said...

Prophesies of doom in both of these - great takes:-)

EG Wow said...

Ray is smart to be wary, I fear. :) And it seems appropriate that the parrot should be so wise. Good ones!

gospelwriter said...

lol... why does it always seem already too late when we begin doubting, I wonder. Nice MM!

Deborah said...

Wonderfully done ... both of them!!

samurai said...

Very clever. I like it.

I figured my link was wrong... but only because you pointed it out to me. 8/

Thank you for stopping by though.

Akelamalu said...

Your heroine and mine had their doubts this week. ;)

septembermom said...

That is clever and intriguing. Loved it!

hope said...

That high up I'd be shivering too! :)

Michelle said...

Gotta love the fantasy. I was looking at the picture trying to figure out how people were going to write this. There are so many different forms are art and expression, no?

Pat said...

Michelle: Yes, I'm always amazed at the myriad of different creative "stories" people come up with. (that is, ...with which people come up.)

ruthi said...

awesome micro story... i enjoyed them both.

izzy said...

Caution is a good thing !